Memento
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Since X already ripped Krangthebrain's replies football-wise, I'm going to rip him apart psychologically and grammatically. Starting...now:
Well, that's good to hear, Mr. Narcissist. Nobody says "I" that many times in a single sentence without sounding like a pretentious fuck. You make yourself sound so important, likely because this facade of sounding informed is the only thing you have in this life.
There should be no colon after "slightly." You aren't listing your points, so it is completely unnecessary.
You're simply jealous that the last good running back you had was...oh, wait a minute; your team has never had a good running back, have they? Your feelings of inadequacy are quite strong. Also, add a "he" after the "but." I can't stand it when people cut words out of sentences like that. You aren't speaking it out loud. You're spelling it out loud. You can get away with spoken terms like that, but you can't get away with written terms.
There should be a comma between "in" and "and" and a comma between "kickoff" (which is misspelled) and "this." TD could mean a variety of things, but you should say "touchdown" to clarify. "3" should be "three", and I will explain why in the next paragraph. I also have absolutely no idea where the last sentence is going because there are so many things that are wrong grammatically (which isn't even mentioning that there was only one blown fumble call in this game). The sentence would make more sense if it were "I would argue that the blown fumble call cost us, too. The Cardinals clearly recovered the second one." See how it flows better?
Every number that is one-hundred and below should be spelled out. Eleven, twenty-five, ten, eight, and nine are the correct terms. Also, your delusional efforts to claim superiority over our team baffles me. We won the game this time. Maybe you're talking about alternate universes and timelines, but we live in this one, not some make-believe fantasy world. In another universe, I would've been born fully female instead of being transgendered. Unfortunately, that isn't the case, so we have to make the best of things with what we are given.
The too long, didn't read version? Your team lost. Deal with it.
St. Louis should have a full stop after "St", as it's an abbreviation of "Saint." There should also be a comma between "Louis" and "since," as there is a pause between the two words. And worst home-field advantage? Tell us that. Go ahead and tell us that when we kicked the asses of the Seahawks at home. I was there. A lot of people here were there. We made that stadium rock. So go ahead and tell us that we're an awful team. It might make you sleep better at night, but it doesn't make it true.
Nope. Please get the fuck out of our forum if you're going to be a sore loser.
Well, that's good to hear, Mr. Narcissist. Nobody says "I" that many times in a single sentence without sounding like a pretentious fuck. You make yourself sound so important, likely because this facade of sounding informed is the only thing you have in this life.
There should be no colon after "slightly." You aren't listing your points, so it is completely unnecessary.
You're simply jealous that the last good running back you had was...oh, wait a minute; your team has never had a good running back, have they? Your feelings of inadequacy are quite strong. Also, add a "he" after the "but." I can't stand it when people cut words out of sentences like that. You aren't speaking it out loud. You're spelling it out loud. You can get away with spoken terms like that, but you can't get away with written terms.
There should be a comma between "in" and "and" and a comma between "kickoff" (which is misspelled) and "this." TD could mean a variety of things, but you should say "touchdown" to clarify. "3" should be "three", and I will explain why in the next paragraph. I also have absolutely no idea where the last sentence is going because there are so many things that are wrong grammatically (which isn't even mentioning that there was only one blown fumble call in this game). The sentence would make more sense if it were "I would argue that the blown fumble call cost us, too. The Cardinals clearly recovered the second one." See how it flows better?
Every number that is one-hundred and below should be spelled out. Eleven, twenty-five, ten, eight, and nine are the correct terms. Also, your delusional efforts to claim superiority over our team baffles me. We won the game this time. Maybe you're talking about alternate universes and timelines, but we live in this one, not some make-believe fantasy world. In another universe, I would've been born fully female instead of being transgendered. Unfortunately, that isn't the case, so we have to make the best of things with what we are given.
The too long, didn't read version? Your team lost. Deal with it.
St. Louis should have a full stop after "St", as it's an abbreviation of "Saint." There should also be a comma between "Louis" and "since," as there is a pause between the two words. And worst home-field advantage? Tell us that. Go ahead and tell us that when we kicked the asses of the Seahawks at home. I was there. A lot of people here were there. We made that stadium rock. So go ahead and tell us that we're an awful team. It might make you sleep better at night, but it doesn't make it true.
Nope. Please get the fuck out of our forum if you're going to be a sore loser.
